In this wonderful scheme of things you actually receive a B- for effort and hard work. Where you lost everybody ended up being in the particulars. You know, they say, details make or break the argument.. And that couldn't be more correct right here. Having said that, let me inform you exactly what did work. Your text can be extremely engaging and that is possibly why I am making the effort to opine. I do not make it a regular habit of doing that. Secondly, whilst I can see the jumps in reasoning you come up with, I am not really sure of how you seem to connect the points which inturn make the conclusion. For the moment I shall subscribe to your issue however wish in the foreseeable future you actually link your dots better.